Fuck....
Dude, the notes don't even fit the freaking song.
You can't just put any loop at random pitch together and pretend it'S a song.
jesus christ man...do you even listen to what you compose ? Some of your music is alright but this one totally blows...the notes doesn'T fit together at all...it's just ugly.
Peace, keep doing music you'll get it someday hehe
I remember using loops but try using loops that fits together for christ's sake.